Describe something you saw: wood hammers nails mum and I hammering nails into the wood palings and dad drilling.
HEAR Describe something you heard. Bang! Bang! Went the hammer Drills were Drilling music was
blasting out of the boombox banging sounds were
booming through the houses
Describe something you heard Tasting Delicious Pizza bread sizzling hot chips Drinking bubbling fuzzies
for drinks
Describe something you smelt. Smelling fresh air wood and fresh grass smelling all the fresh food that gets put on the table
FEEL
Describe something you felt. Feeling wood sharp nails and metal drills
Also feeling my rubber gloves
hi ahi this is Talaofa from glenbrae school i am a year 6 student. instead of saying you felt nails what kind of feeling did you feel like happy or sad pls reply to my comment and let me know.
ReplyDelete-Talaofa
But I had to talk about Nails because but I see what you are saying
DeleteI felt tried because It took to long :(
HI Ahi, my name is Anika and I go to Paihia School. I really liked your recount about deconstruction because I love hot chips and bubbly drinks. When you described the things you smelt I felt like I was there because when you said I smelt the air and wood, I could imagine the smell of the wood. Did your construction recount take place at home?
ReplyDeleteHi Ahi my name is Jacob and I’m a year six student at Paihia School. You have a great post about your deconstructed recount. I haven’t done a recount in a while but I remember when we had to do imagery to help to describe my writing better. It sounded like you had a real good time.
ReplyDeleteWhat were you building?
Kia ora Ahi my name is Boston and I’m a year 7 student at Paihia School. I enjoyed reading your post about your deconstructed recount because I think it’s good that you were building because it is a good exercise. This post reminds me of when we had to help our father with clearing a section so we can make a house on that section.
ReplyDeleteWas it fun building?
Hi Ahi my name is Ebony and I am a year seven from Paihia School. I enjoyed reading about your deconstructed recount writing. I found it interesting about how much punctuation you used in your writing. It gave me a lot of information about what you are describing in your writing. It also wanted me to smell what you smelt. If you could ever write about something what would you write about?
ReplyDeleteHi Ebony its me from Ahipara school Ahi I would maybe write about this game. it is really fun its called roblox I like to play it with my friends have you ever played roblox before?
DeleteKia ora Ahi, ko Ms Peters toku ingoa. Nō te kura o Ahipara ahau.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your Deconstructed recount. I like the way I could see the images you described in my mind. To be better than before (BTB) maybe you could add more detail by writing a paragraph for each sense and include an image. Keep up the good effort! Mā te wa, Ms Peters.