W.A.L.T a couple days back we had to do our holiday recount so here is all my holiday stuff I did.
Holiday recount
The grass rising above my hair on my head. I was playing in the golden beaming sun as I see my dogs coming closer and closer.
I heard some barking. It sounded like it was coming from the other side of my fence. Oh no it's my dog as he was getting closer and closer.
When I get back home, I’m super tired. I've been up the whole day doing stuff. Nice KFC yummy. As I was smelling my dinner it smelt very nice. I also liked the kfc because it smelt very good
I felt good because I could go on the laptop (the end)...
My Reflection was... I did very good at making a interesting story. Next time I could add a little bit more writing.
Kia ora Ahi,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your holiday recount and the way you described what you did in the holidays. Maybe next time you could add punctuation, work on your layout and include a drawing/photo to go with your recount. Blog ya later! Ms Peters.
Hi Ahi it's your friend Hayden. Your story is pretty cool. Maybe next time add some more, because it just feels like it's too short. Keep up the good work! Blog ya later.
ReplyDeleteHi Hayden its your friend Ahi from Ahipara school yeah that's what I said it was to short and you have a good point as well
DeleteHi my name is Logan I am a year six student at Paihia School. I’m commenting on your blog because it sounds interesting and because it sounds like you had a good day. I have had a similar day but I don’t have a dog although I have 2 cats. From what you have told me it sounds like you have had fun.
DeleteIs KFC Your favorite take away?